well, i can find no fault with your translation from latin, but the olde english could use some work ;)
it's more like
Venus! - I trusted you were my friend
Swore upon heaven you wouldn't come
As a disciple of a villian
Was your (or the, I'm not quite clear on this) tragedy and act.
well, i can find no fault with your translation from latin, but the olde english could use some work ;)
it's more like
Venus! - I trusted you were my friend Swore upon heaven you wouldn't come As a disciple of a villian Was your (or the, I'm not quite clear on this) tragedy and act.